Put More Drama Into Your Writing—Creating Conflict in Your Dialogue

By Chris Mathews


Dialogue in writing can set mood and establish character, but without one essential quality dialogue can also derail any story.  Good dialogue must contain conflict.  Conflict drives drama and conflict drives all good storytelling.  Where conflict is lacking, usually, so is drama.   In the play GARGOYLES, a one-act I published, I mentioned the importance of the two gargoyles using ornate Latin-derived words to establish a medieval quality to their dialogue.  But the characters would have been little more than intrusive onlookers if I had not been able to define a clear relationship between them.  Notice where the first conflict between the two helps to define their relationships, provide humor, and bring the gargoyles into the modern story they are observing:

FIRST GARGOYLE.   Stone silence…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Mocks mankind’s folly.

FIRST GARGOYLE.   Demons dwell in eaves…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Caught in granite guffaws…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   We outlast your short time…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Withstand your orangutan rantings…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   Your humanegomania…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Your acid haze…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   Corrodes our veins…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   So permit us…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   From our lofty perches…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   To comment…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   To criticize…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   To cajole…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   To view from afar…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   To scrutinize with a looking-glass…

FIRST GARGOYLE.   To provide comic relief…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Though these humans provide their own quite well.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    We will be their funhouse mirror…

            SECOND GARGOYLE.   Grotesques.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    It takes a grotesque to know a grotesque.

SECOND GARGOYLE.   In bas-relief.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    We entreat you to observe…

SECOND GARGOYLE.    The intolerance…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    The hypocrisy…

SECOND GARGOYLE.    The passion…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    The insidiousness…

SECOND GARGOYLE.    The vainglory…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    The truth-tellers…

SECOND GARGOYLE.   And the liars…

FIRST GARGOYLE.     The dreamers…

SECOND GARGOYLE.    And the quashers of dreams…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    The religious zealots…

SECOND GARGOYLE.    And, of course…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Of course, what?

SECOND GARGOYLE.    Of course, what what?

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Don’t mimic me!

SECOND GARGOYLE.    You mimicked me!

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Mimicked me, you?

SECOND GARGOYLE.     You me mimicked!

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Enough!

SECOND GARGOYLE.    Of course, what we are about…

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Which is?

SECOND GARGOYLE.    Demons.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Real?

SECOND GARGOYLE.   Or imagined.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Either way.

SECOND GARGOYLE.    Shhh!  They’re scheming.

FIRST GARGOYLE.    Dreaming dreams no mortal ever

dared to dream before…

How is the conflict created between the two gargoyles?  I believe it occurs when the Second Gargoyle rants pretentiously, “Of course, what...” [bold italics]. With this hint, she (the Gargoyles in the original production were played by two female actors) may know more than the First Gargoyle sets the two in a tizzy, characterizing the relationship throughout the play and creatings a lot of fun for the audience as they watch their elaborate attempts at one-upmanship.  They pave the way for future conflicts at this moment when they clash, but they also assure the audience that they will entertain. Conflict drives dialogue.  It is immediate. The characters listen intently to each other so they get what they want from each other--an advantage.